Diagnosis
What is probably happening.
Formal writing often gets blamed when the real issue is generic formality. Precise academic language is fine. The risky version uses broad claims, abstract nouns, and polished transitions without showing evidence or the writer's reasoning.
- The essay uses academic tone but not enough source-specific detail.
- Sentences are grammatically clean but follow the same rhythm repeatedly.
- The writer removed personal reasoning while trying to sound professional.
- The final wording is smoother than the notes, outline, or earlier draft stages.
- The draft has claims that sound confident but do not show where the evidence came from.